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Some people think that youngsters should get involved in unpaid work, while others oppose as it may affect their career. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include and relevant examples.

#people #youngsters #work #career
Is
involvement
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the involvement
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 of
youngsters
 in unpaid
work
 reasonable or could it affect their career? For the longest time in
history
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youngsters
 have been used as a cheap source of labor. It is believed that a child can
work
 as much as an adult
,
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while
 being paid less.
Till
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this
 day it is still common for some poverty-stricken countries to go around the law and involve
children
 in hard
work
. I disagree that
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the
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involvement
 of
youngsters
 in many different aspects is acceptable
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 because it is unacceptable to take advantage of a younger person who still hasn’t fully developed his self-conscious mind. One justification would be that people who think that
youngsters
 should involve themselves in unpaid
work
 don’t see the possibility of ruining the youngster's childhood. Most
of
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people who decide that their
children
 should
work
 from a young
age
,
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 are parents who want their
children
 to be successful. It is a popular misconception that
youngsters
 who start working from an early
age
 will be up to speed with the older
children
. It may be true, but
by
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doing that to a youngster from an early
age
 will create a barrier between
the
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childhood and
the
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adolescence.
Also
, the child will not experience the importance of freedom and creativity,
while
 starting to
work
 from an early
age
. Personally, I
also
 believe that
youngsters
 who do not get paid for their
work
 will lose a sense of motivation to do something for a reward. It will make them unmotivated to try harder in school
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because the grade wouldn’t be worth anything to them. A
further
 reason not to involve
youngsters
 in unpaid
work
 would be that they won’t be able to do tasks given to them properly
due to
the
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 lack of experience. Supporters of
this
 type of youngster
involvement
 in unpaid
work
 believe that working should be beneficial to the growing child in order to deter them from becoming lazy and unproductive members part of the community.
However
, there is very little evidence to suggest that
work
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 from
young
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a young
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age
 is beneficial for the future. In conclusion, involving
youngsters
 in unpaid
work
 is unethical and, in my opinion, ineffective, both for
work
 and career reasons. That said, it would be useful to talk with the
children
 and get to know what they would want to do for a job and what kind of
a
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payment would suit them the best. I strongly believe that
involvement
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the involvement
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 of
youngsters
 in unpaid
work
 should be based on communication between the people and their
children
.
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