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Today, more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Why?

#people #robots #tasks #home #work #development
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 of
people
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 are willing to utilize artificial intelligence to accomplish their
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tasks
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 in the places where
people
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 live and
work
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. From my point of view, using
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robots
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 in
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 places is a positive development and
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 trend is the hectic schedule of
people
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. In the modern era, most
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 have too much burden on their shoulders. They have to
work
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 tremendously hard to lead their life towards an impressive growth trajectory.
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 busy
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 schedule leaves less spare time at their disposal.
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 they take the services of
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 to do menial
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 as dusting and mopping. With the support of
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, they can live
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comfortable life and focus on their
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. A study conducted by Oxford university
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revealed that engaging
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 for household chores save about 30 hours of quality time per week.
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, making
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 do
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 at home and in the workplace is counterproductive for human beings because we need
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 physical
workout
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 to remain fit and healthy. There is no denying
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 conviction that simple
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 as washing the car or arranging the files make us burn calories. Apart from
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, engagement in physical
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 stretches our body, which is a must-have to keep us in good shape. So, due to the overuse of robotic machines, human beings are becoming more prone to diseases. America is the prime example, where the rising usage of Rumba
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 for cleaning homes has led to a tremendous increase in the percentage of the overweight population. To conclude, the rising usage of
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 at workplaces and homes is due to the demanding schedules of
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people
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.
Overutilastion
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Overutilization
 of these machines is an imprudent approach because they decline our physical activity.
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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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