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Today, more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Why?

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 days,
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 of
people
 are willing to utilize artificial intelligence to accomplish their
tusks
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tasks
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 in the places where
people
 live and
work
. From my point of view, using
the
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robots
 in
such
 places is a positive development and
this
 essay will explain why it is a positive trend. The main reason for
this
 trend is the hectic schedule of
people
. In the modern era, most
people
 have too much burden on their shoulders. They have to
work
 tremendously hard to lead their life towards an impressive growth trajectory.
This
 busy
work
 schedule leaves less spare time at their disposal.
Therefore
 they take the services of
robots
 to do menial
tasks
such
 as dusting and mopping. With the support of
robots
, they can live
a
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comfortable life and focus on their
work
. A study conducted by Oxford university
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revealed that engaging
robots
 for household chores save about 30 hours of quality time per week.
However
, making
robots
 do
tasks
 at home and in the workplace is counterproductive for human beings because we need
sufficient
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 physical
workout
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 to remain fit and healthy. There is no denying
this
 conviction that simple
tasks
such
 as washing the car or arranging the files make us burn calories. Apart from
this
, engagement in physical
tasks
 stretches our body, which is a must-have to keep us in good shape. So, due to the overuse of robotic machines, human beings are becoming more prone to diseases. America is the prime example, where the rising usage of Rumba
robot
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 for cleaning homes has led to a tremendous increase in the percentage of the overweight population. To conclude, the rising usage of
robots
 at workplaces and homes is due to the demanding schedules of
the
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people
.
Overutilastion
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Overutilization
 of these machines is an imprudent approach because they decline our physical activity.
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