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Are we too dependent on antibiotics? Discuss both sides and goive your own opinion.

#antibiotics #goive
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 of
antibiotics
 and why do we rely on
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 too much
?
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This
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days
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big
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 number of
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medications
medicines
medicons
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medications
 created,
however
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 we tend to
be use
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antibiotics
 more often than
it
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we
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 should
be
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. Regardless
the
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 classification of that
medicon
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medical
medication
, effects on disease
is
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regarding
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one of
very
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This
 essay aims to
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the dependence
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dependence
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of
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antibiotics
.
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 with,
yet
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 it is effective it can be harmful in
such
 ways. In our
body
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 there are amount of
bacteria
,
which
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and
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 some of
them
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provides
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 supplements that are needed,
however
 other
ones
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bacteria
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which
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harms
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 our health.
Although
 we cannot see on one side. The thing that will not go out of use is "
Antibiotics
" "Two-sided sword",
affect
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 us much
its
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treated but in
negative
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a negative
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 way.
Furthermore
, it kills all the
bacteria
, even the convenient ones. In order to heal us from the disease which can be seen as to perspective Due to the fact that it is the most effective for
such
 infections and they may either kill or inhibit the growth of
bacteria
.
Also
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 the choice of antibiotic given will
also
 be based on its cost. As the fact
that
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mention
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mentioned
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it
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before "The most effective towards infection" makes us too dependent on it.
For
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 my perspective
its
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it's
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 the most known medicine type due to its popularity of effectiveness, which
are
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 made
enourmouss
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enormous
infact
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in fact
impact
 in the medical industry and still
have
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 been
making
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 since ancient Egypt.  A a a a a a a
a
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a
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a
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dependence
  • antibiotics
  • health outcomes
  • bacterial infections
  • preventive measures
  • surgeries
  • control
  • infectious diseases
  • integrated
  • dentistry
  • dermatology
  • overuse
  • misuse
  • antibiotic resistance
  • global health concern
  • inappropriate use
  • side effects
  • alternative treatments
  • holistic approach
  • healthcare
  • invest
  • research and development
  • awareness campaigns
  • public understanding
  • proper use
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