In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be the case ? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In many nations around the world , buying a
house
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is more significant
instead
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of living somewhere by paying rent.
From
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my opinion
,
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apply

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to
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living
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in
people
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's own
house
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can bring ample
positive
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positives

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and in
this
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essay I will give reasons for my view. On
one
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hand, there are two main advantages to
live
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in someone's own
house
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.
To begin
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with
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,with

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every person has great memories
at
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of

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their living
place
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, where they worn and grew up.
In other words
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,
people
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feel comfortable
to live
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at
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in

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their old
place
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.
This
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is because, they feel very familiar with everything
life
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in life

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,
such
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as neighbours, shops,
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playground
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playground

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play ground
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, and so on.
As a result
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of
this
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, they can easily get inner peace.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore

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Further more
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,
people
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do not have to pay extra money
as
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for

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a
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apply

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rent . The reason for
this
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is that the
house
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is no
one
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else property. Meanwhile, it saves
a
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an

The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word owener.

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owener
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owner
lower

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cost. A case in point,
me
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my

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and family
we
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live in our own
place
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and because of
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this
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,this

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we do not have to pay anyone
to
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additional money. At the end of the
year
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me
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I

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found that our expenditure is less than others.
On the other hand
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,
people
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who
lives
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live

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in a
renting
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rented

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house
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is
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are

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also
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important for
one
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reason.
People
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who
lives
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live

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in a
renting
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rented

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house
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they
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apply

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can shift to other places continuously. For
on
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apply

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example,
One
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of my
friend
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friends

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who
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apply

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lives
in
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abroad along with his family.
Although
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his father is a government
employ
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employee

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, they often change their
home
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to other places for his father's
transferred
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transfer

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, which is quite easy for them to
moved
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move

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in
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to

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a new
home
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only because
of
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apply

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they live in
renting
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rented

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home
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. To conclude,
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although
though
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although
though

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athough
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although
both views are necessary
to
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for

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few
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a few

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countries
among
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around

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the globe, I believe that owning a
home
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is much more beneficial than living in a
renting
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rented

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one
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, because
of
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apply

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the advantages are more in staying at own
place
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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