In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be the case ? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In many nations around the world , buying a
house
is more significant
instead
of living somewhere by paying rent.
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my opinion
,
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to
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living
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in
people
's own
house
can bring ample
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and in
this
essay I will give reasons for my view. On
one
hand, there are two main advantages to
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in someone's own
house
.
To begin
with
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every person has great memories
at
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their living
place
, where they worn and grew up.
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,
people
feel comfortable
to live
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at
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their old
place
.
This
is because, they feel very familiar with everything
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,
such
as neighbours, shops,
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playground
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play ground
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, and so on.
As a result
of
this
, they can easily get inner peace.
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Further more
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,
people
do not have to pay extra money
as
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a
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rent . The reason for
this
is that the
house
is no
one
else property. Meanwhile, it saves
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owener
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owner
lower
cost. A case in point,
me
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and family
we
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live in our own
place
and because of
this
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we do not have to pay anyone
to
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additional money. At the end of the
year
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me
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found that our expenditure is less than others.
On the other hand
,
people
who
lives
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in a
renting
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house
is
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also
important for
one
reason.
People
who
lives
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in a
renting
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house
they
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can shift to other places continuously. For
on
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example,
One
of my
friend
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who
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lives
in
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abroad along with his family.
Although
his father is a government
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, they often change their
home
to other places for his father's
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, which is quite easy for them to
moved
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in
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a new
home
only because
of
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they live in
renting
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home
. To conclude,
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although
though
athough
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although
both views are necessary
to
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few
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a few
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countries
among
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the globe, I believe that owning a
home
is much more beneficial than living in a
renting
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one
, because
of
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the advantages are more in staying at own
place
.
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