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Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there are two opposite beliefs about the educational system in many
nations
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. Some
people
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 believe that the
amount
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 of budget governments invest
on
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in
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skills
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 and vocational training for practical
work
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 should be larger than that
on
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in
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university
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education
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. Meanwhile, the others support the
contrast
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 view. From my perspective, the weight of practical
work
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 and theories in schools is merely equal so both of them should be invested. On the one hand, theoretical
courses
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 organized on
university
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education
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 are one of the
first
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 requirements of
people
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 in the market. Most of the positions in society require qualified employees, which means they should
enroll
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 in theoretical
courses
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 at
university
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 to get more academic knowledge and achieve the necessary certificates.
Moreover
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, the professional
courses
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 are strong basements for
people
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 to develop their career path in the
long-term
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long term
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.
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, they have more opportunities to promote to higher levels or apply
these knowledge
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this knowledge
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 and
work
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 in many different fields, leading to
utilization
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the utilization
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 of human resources in many
nations
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.
Thus
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 theoretical
courses
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 organized on
university
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education
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 are worth for government allocating money to.
On the other hand
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,
skills
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 and vocational training for practical
work
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 are
also
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 important for
nations
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 in many aspects.
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, when the particular worker,
such
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 as electricians, workers in
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the factory
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factory
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factories
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,
cleaners
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and cleaners
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 own good
skills
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 and are trained carefully, not only
the
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do the
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 customers become more confident in using
service
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the service
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 but
also
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the
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a
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 higher salary can be paid to the workers, helping ensure the spending for their life.
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, after gaining
the
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solid
skills
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,
people
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 can transfer them to
other
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others
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 who cannot get the
qualifies
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qualifications
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, resulting in a decrease in unemployment rates.
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, it is reasonable for
government
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the government
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 to distribute the budget to develop
skills
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 and vocational training. In conclusion,
although
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university
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education
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 should be maintained in many
nations
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 to many modern sectors
such
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 as technology,industry,
ect
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etc
.,
skills
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 and vocational training for practical
work
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is
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are
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 focused on
to develop
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developing
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 for ensuring
life
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a life
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 of many qualified
people
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.

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