Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there are two opposite beliefs about the educational system in many
nations
. Some
people
believe that the
amount
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of budget governments invest
on
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skills
and vocational training for practical
work
should be larger than that
on
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university
education
. Meanwhile, the others support the
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view. From my perspective, the weight of practical
work
and theories in schools is merely equal so both of them should be invested. On the one hand, theoretical
courses
organized on
university
education
are one of the
first
requirements of
people
in the market. Most of the positions in society require qualified employees, which means they should
enroll
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in theoretical
courses
at
university
to get more academic knowledge and achieve the necessary certificates.
Moreover
, the professional
courses
are strong basements for
people
to develop their career path in the
long-term
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long term
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.
For example
, they have more opportunities to promote to higher levels or apply
these knowledge
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this knowledge
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and
work
in many different fields, leading to
utilization
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of human resources in many
nations
.
Thus
theoretical
courses
organized on
university
education
are worth for government allocating money to.
On the other hand
,
skills
and vocational training for practical
work
are
also
important for
nations
in many aspects.
In particular
, when the particular worker,
such
as electricians, workers in
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factory
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factories
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,
cleaners
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own good
skills
and are trained carefully, not only
the
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customers become more confident in using
service
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but
also
the
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higher salary can be paid to the workers, helping ensure the spending for their life.
Furthermore
, after gaining
the
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solid
skills
,
people
can transfer them to
other
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others
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who cannot get the
qualifies
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qualifications
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, resulting in a decrease in unemployment rates.
Therefore
, it is reasonable for
government
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the government
a government
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to distribute the budget to develop
skills
and vocational training. In conclusion,
although
university
education
should be maintained in many
nations
to many modern sectors
such
as technology,industry,
ect
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etc
.,
skills
and vocational training for practical
work
is
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focused on
to develop
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developing
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for ensuring
life
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a life
the life
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of many qualified
people
.
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