Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there are two opposite beliefs about the educational system in many
nations
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. Some
people
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believe that the
amount
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of budget governments invest
on
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skills
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and vocational training for practical
work
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should be larger than that
on
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university
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education
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. Meanwhile, the others support the
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view. From my perspective, the weight of practical
work
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and theories in schools is merely equal so both of them should be invested. On the one hand, theoretical
courses
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organized on
university
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education
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are one of the
first
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requirements of
people
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in the market. Most of the positions in society require qualified employees, which means they should
enroll
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in theoretical
courses
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at
university
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to get more academic knowledge and achieve the necessary certificates.
Moreover
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, the professional
courses
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are strong basements for
people
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to develop their career path in the
long-term
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long term
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.
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, they have more opportunities to promote to higher levels or apply
these knowledge
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this knowledge
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and
work
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in many different fields, leading to
utilization
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the utilization
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of human resources in many
nations
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.
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theoretical
courses
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organized on
university
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education
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are worth for government allocating money to.
On the other hand
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,
skills
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and vocational training for practical
work
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are
also
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important for
nations
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in many aspects.
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, when the particular worker,
such
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as electricians, workers in
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the factory
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factory
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factories
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,
cleaners
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and cleaners
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own good
skills
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and are trained carefully, not only
the
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customers become more confident in using
service
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but
also
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the
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higher salary can be paid to the workers, helping ensure the spending for their life.
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, after gaining
the
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solid
skills
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,
people
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can transfer them to
other
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others
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who cannot get the
qualifies
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, resulting in a decrease in unemployment rates.
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, it is reasonable for
government
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the government
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to distribute the budget to develop
skills
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and vocational training. In conclusion,
although
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university
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education
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should be maintained in many
nations
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to many modern sectors
such
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as technology,industry,
ect
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etc
.,
skills
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and vocational training for practical
work
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is
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are
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focused on
to develop
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developing
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for ensuring
life
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a life
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of many qualified
people
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.
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