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Writing Samples
Band 6

Your friend asked you to teach his son English. You need to borrow some English books from your teacher. Write a letter to your teacher requesting these materials. In your letter you should share: - Details about the child. - What type of books you need. - When and where you are going to teach this child

Dear Mr. Brown, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in excellent spirits. I am writing to ask for some informative English
books
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.
Initially
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, those
books
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are
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 fundamental for my friend's 11-year-old son, who is called Alex. He is
also
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 a quick learner with rapid understanding.
In addition
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 to his curiosity
to
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about
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 English, he wants to communicate with people internationally. Prior to focusing on grammar, I would like to teach Alex pronunciation techniques, learning basic expressions,
similarly
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 at shopping, school, and hospital,
might
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which might
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 be great resources as a first step.
In addition
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, to reinforce his pronunciation to get several
books
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 might be great support. We promised to start lessons as of next week, March 11, on Monday. Each course will
last
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 two hours with 10-minute breaks.
Furthermore
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, Toronto Public Library is a convenient place where it has peer study rooms throughout our scheduled learning period.
This
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 place has
also
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 volunteers who are university students,
can
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and can
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 assist him by speaking. Thank you for
consideration
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your consideration
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 and time. I look forward to receiving these
books
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 soon. Yours sincerely,  Ozgurk Dalgal

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use clear paragraphs, each focusing on one main idea.
task achievement
Try to expand a little more on why each type of book is necessary for Alex.
greeting and closing
The letter has a polite greeting and a nice closing.
task achievement
The details about Alex are clear and highlight his abilities.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proficiency
  • learning style
  • grammar
  • vocabulary
  • storybooks
  • materials
  • request
  • conducting lessons
  • age-appropriate
  • engaging
  • audio-visual aids
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