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Many students at college opt to live on campus. What are the benefits and drawbacks of campus life?

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Most students at college opt to live on
campus
 and they think that it’s better than
live
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living
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on
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at
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house
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the house
a house
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.
Live
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Living
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 on
campus
 has advantages as
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a student
the student
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student
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students
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 can find new friends or have
time
 to learn or it has disadvantages like they will miss
the
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apply
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home
either
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or
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 spend
time
to come
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 to college.
To begin
 with, there are a lot of advantages which makes
student
 stay
in
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on
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campus
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the campus
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.
Time
 always plays important role in
student’s
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a student’s
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 life and by saving
time
,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 will do all tasks which college will give to them.
Hence
 in
free
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their free
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time
 which
summoned
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is summoned
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 by saving
time
,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 can rest from hard work.
Secondly
,
find
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finding
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 friends who will help you in
hard
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a hard
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time
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times
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 is
main
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a main
the main
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 mission
on
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of
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 students’ life.
In
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On
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campus
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,campus
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 they might find a good
friend
 with
same
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the same
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thought
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thoughts
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 which
student
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students
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 have.
For example
, my brother
who
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apply
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lived on
campus
 and found many friends who can help
to
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apply
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him in
bad
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a bad
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time
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times
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.
As a result
,
find
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finding
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 a
friend
in
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on
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campus
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the campus
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 is one of
good
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the good
a good
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thing
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things
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of
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on
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campus
.
On the other hand
,
live
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living
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 on
campus
 has disadvantages like miss
home
 or annoying
neighbors
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neighbours
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.
Home
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The home
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where
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, where student had lived when they were child,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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had
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lived when they were
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a child
the child
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child
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children
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 is
very
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a very
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 warm and pleasant place and
leave
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leaving
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 the house isn’t
easy
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an easy
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 task for everyone, so due to
thought
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the thought
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 about
home
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the home
a home
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 which makes
student
 miss
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their house
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house
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houses
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, may become
reason
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the reason
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of
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for
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 depression which right now many students has it who lived on
campus
.
Secondly
, all
experience
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experiences
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 of
student
 life can be broken by roommates. Bad roommates can joke
on
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with
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 you or they will take your tools without your permission and lose it.
For instance
, my sister’s
friend
who
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apply
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lived on
campus
 with
bad
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a bad
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 roommate, sister’s
friend
 had told to her that every day was
as
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apply
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hell for her, because roommates always steal her items and told
to
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apply
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everyone
how
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that
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 she is bad and annoying even
the
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though the
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 evil roommate was a
neighbor
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neighbour
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.
Therefore
, bad
neighbors
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neighbours
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 will stress students and make them depressed. All know that depressed
student
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students
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 can do all
thing
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things
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 to lose from illness even do suicide. In conclusion,
live
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living
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 on
campus
 has
good
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a good
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 and bad
side
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sides
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 like
spend
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spending
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time
to
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apply
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only study by saving
time
 or always
be
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being
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 in conflict with
neighbors
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neighbours
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, but
live
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living
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 on
campus
 is
students’
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the students’
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 choice.
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