Some people believe that studying for a university degree is better for an individual’s career than gaining work experience immediately after high school. To what extend do you agree or disagree

Some believe that pursuing a university degree is more beneficial for an individual´s
career
than gaining work experience directly after finishing high
school
. In my opinion, I disagree
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statement because I believe that students need to gain practical experience after
school
to grow personally and
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career wise
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. One reason
for
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that
school
graduates
need
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to gain practical experience after years of studying theoretically. Nowadays the global education system is very theoretical without any
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learning
learing
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learning
involved.
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students are conditioned to read multiple books a month and become familiar with different
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formulas.
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might be good for their level of education but will not help them to encounter practical wisdom. A recent study showed that
school
levers who pursued a job after
school
had higher
career
opportunities than their
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who went to university straight after graduating.
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is because labour teaches adolescents multiple life lessons. Working in a business or a company will instruct former pupils how to collaborate and cooperate with each other.
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men and women will gain knowledge about investing and saving. These factors are highly essential and important in our today’s life.
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academic places like schools do not provide lessons about various efficient spending and saving ways and how to invest wisely.
Additionally
working practically may help humans to learn from errors which leads to personal development and
therefore
higher
career
chances.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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