It is important for people to take risks, both in their personal lives and professional lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages.

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the risk
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risk
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that affects person’s special and professional parts of their
lives
. About
this
important
idea
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I assume that taking
risk
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creating
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creates
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more beneficial and advantageous situations in
person’s
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a person’s
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lives
include with both sides.
First
, when a human being came across
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a situation that needs to make a decision,
brain
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the brain
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always
calculate
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all the possibilities for any case. Generally,
person
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a person
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choose
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one of the easiest solutions to apply in circumstances.
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the other hand choosing the
second
option will be riskier for approaching the feeling of being in
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the safe
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zone.
For
example
, my biology teacher,
Ms.
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Sandra
working
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in a government school, and she has
average
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an average
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salary with a stable
life
standard. If
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Sandra quits her job for applying
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master where she desired, she would be
scientist
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a scientist
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her dream university or research lab with a better budget to spend what she wants.
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example
examines the importance of taking
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a risk
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risk
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in
a
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professional
life
.
Secondly
, if we need to mention taking
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risk
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in
personal
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lives
, we can’t ignore the feelings coming from
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our heart
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heart
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. There is research
in
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California Technical University and the results show that “When
brain
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the brain
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making
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makes
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a decision about family and friends,
human
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the human
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body
creating
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creates
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different hormones”. It’s harder to
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a risk
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in personal
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to professional
lives
.
Besides
,
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of
this
risk
is more valuable. If I need to give an
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a clear
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picture in the minds;
last
year,
friend
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a friend
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of mine had a problem with her husband but she can’t divorce because of the child.
Then
she took the
risk
for her own
life
to live it free and regardless.
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this
year, she has a boyfriend, and she is extremely satisfied with her decision. Taking
risk
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on
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special
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a special
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situation like
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reflect
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the importance of it. To summarize the idea
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I supported, taking
the
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big
risk
always brings
with
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the present
into
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to
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the
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apply
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life
. The brave
persons
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people
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who take the risks will realize the effects on their own
lives
.
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