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COUNTRIES ARE BECOMING MORE AND MORE SIMILAR BECAUSE PEOPLE ARE ABLE TO BUY THE SAME PRODUCTS ANYWHERE IN THE WORLD. DO YOU THINK IS A POSITIVE OR NEGETIVE DEVELOPMENT?

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In
this
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 21st century, society has become more advanced and
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, they can able to purchase trending products anywhere in the world. I think it is a more positive development outweighs a negative development and I will give some strong reasons in the
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 paragraph to support my opinion.
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, if regions are becoming more similar
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 it is advantageous for every human-beings. Sometimes, shopkeepers have to travel abroad to buy some trending products which are not available in their country and during travelling, they have faced many difficulties.
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, travelling takes 1 week or month.
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, the food of different countries is sometimes not suitable for everyone.
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, if all kinds of things are available everywhere,
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 they do not have any kind of trouble.
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, individuals can save their earnings.
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, occasionally, due to the unavailability of some foodstuffs and beauty products, which are only found in other countries, the community have to pay extra money.
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, “NATIO” is a beauty product which is only available in Australia.
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, if
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 product obtains anywhere,
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 the cost of import and export are saved.
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, it would have drawbacks too. Due to the obtainability of all kinds of things, sometimes, people are copying each other and
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 not good for anyone, for the reason that, somehow the cultural value has been down. Agglomerating all the above points elaborated, I would like to conclude that if nations are becoming more and more similar,
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 the crowd can save their earnings and they do not have to travel anywhere due to inaccessibility of things.
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 it affects the culture, I think it is a positive development.
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