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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages. tech. less theft, quick pay, cyber crime online fraud, every thing in phone ...chori ,

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It has become popular to purchase goods and services online by using cutting-edge
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technological
techological
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technological
 devices
such
 as phone apps all over the world.
This
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 fraud.
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, online payment sometimes is required before
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delivery if you purchase something from another country which makes it simple to commit
cyber
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cybercrime
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crime
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. To illustrate, brands of clothes from Instagram often utilize a strategy of taking money and not providing the product to a
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customer
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costumer
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customer
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.
Therefore
, an Instagram page closes and there is no possibility of taking money back.
As a result
, online payment systems increase the chances of deception. Convenience, I would argue, is a key benefit.
That is
 to say, most people
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 attracted to an instant order and buy
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a thing while sitting comfortably at their homes.
For instance
, there is a wide range of all sorts of goods including food, clothes, furniture,
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and gadgets
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 in apps
such
 as Aliexpress and Wildberries which provides you
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visual convenience so that you can choose
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 all categories and an immediate purchase
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 a credit card with one click.
That is
 why
,
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 quick pay is
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preferred
 by a vast majority of people and is so usable by mainly all countries. In conclusion, while online payment can be a reason
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 unpleasant cheating, it is considerably quicker and a lot easier. As
such
, I would maintain that the disadvantages are far outweighed by the advantages.
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