In some countries, the widespread use of the internet has given people more freedom to work or study at home instead of traveling to work or college. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Internet
nowadays has widened its influence to the point to give
people
freedom more than they used to.
This
freedom gives them the chance to build their career or easily study from home, and
thus
, I agree that the
internet
's advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
Additionally
,
besides
giving so much new knowledge to
people
, the
internet
also
gives a space to interact with new
people
easier. So, we can talk, ask, or have a conversation with anyone we do not even imagine before.
Moreover
, we can use the
internet
to play games, read books, establish an online shop, gain influence, and many other things that we can do which could be benefitting us in the long term.
Furthermore
, with how vast the
internet
is today, everything is built revolving around it, even
people
today start building their products in social media on the
internet
before building the physical store.
Although
, it is not rocket science to understand that every development will
also
bring risks. The
Internet
brings real-life problems and toxicities to a new level of problem.
Moreover
, there is no boundary between private and public life on the
internet
, so, when an idea runs around haphazardly it will crash into another idea and ignite a sort-of catfight between the
internet
users in a flash.
Nevertheless
, everything around the
internet
also
dying so fast, even though, there are records that can be re-read again, but, oftentimes anyone who is involved with it, will be embarrassed if they are asked about it in the real world.
For example
, there is an increase in suicide attempts because of cyberbullying up to 8.7%, and suicidal thoughts to 15%. So, even if it is in social media and has distance from our real life, it can still affect us to the point of thinking to end our life. To summarize, the benefits of the
internet
is outweighing its risks. So, even if the
internet
is surely a scary place to be, we can safely surf inside it, if we know the rules and precautions beforehand.
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