In some countries, the widespread use of the internet has given people more freedom to work or study at home instead of traveling to work or college. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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Internet

nowadays has widened its influence to the point to give

people

freedom more than they used to.

This

freedom gives them the chance to build their career or easily study from home, and

thus

, I agree that the

internet

's advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

Additionally

besides

giving so much new knowledge to

people

, the

internet

also

gives a space to interact with new

people

easier. So, we can talk, ask, or have a conversation with anyone we do not even imagine before.

Moreover

, we can use the

internet

to play games, read books, establish an online shop, gain influence, and many other things that we can do which could be benefitting us in the long term.

Furthermore

, with how vast the

internet

is today, everything is built revolving around it, even

people

today start building their products in social media on the

internet

before building the physical store.

Although

, it is not rocket science to understand that every development will

also

bring risks. The

Internet

brings real-life problems and toxicities to a new level of problem.

Moreover

, there is no boundary between private and public life on the

internet

, so, when an idea runs around haphazardly it will crash into another idea and ignite a sort-of catfight between the

internet

users in a flash.

Nevertheless

, everything around the

internet

also

dying so fast, even though, there are records that can be re-read again, but, oftentimes anyone who is involved with it, will be embarrassed if they are asked about it in the real world.

For example

, there is an increase in suicide attempts because of cyberbullying up to 8.7%, and suicidal thoughts to 15%. So, even if it is in social media and has distance from our real life, it can still affect us to the point of thinking to end our life. To summarize, the benefits of the

internet

is outweighing its risks. So, even if the

internet

is surely a scary place to be, we can safely surf inside it, if we know the rules and precautions beforehand.

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In some countries, the widespread use of the internet has given people more freedom to work or study at home instead of traveling to work or college. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Nowadays some professionals such as doctors, lawyers and engineers are paid much higher than ordinary workers. What do you think of this trend? Are there any jobs which you think should offer higher salaries?

Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause and suggest a possible solution.

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