Some people say that the government should control the amount of violence in films and on TV in order to control violent crimes in society. How far do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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human beings
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completely agree with
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to stop but every person
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essay .
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illegal
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by seeing
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fetal death .
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.
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for
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direction .
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for people who are not above the age of 18 because
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screen they show some
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,
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etc .
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we seldom give
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side of the essay giving a look
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broadcast is not that much of bad .
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to watch flick to enjoy time with their kith and
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and to spend money .
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and action movie more compare to
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romance
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to his/her
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.
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not only
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liability to see against the things which are
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violating
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article published in "HUFFINGTON POST" every man/woman of Abroad countries tell their children to watch tv and films for entertainment purpose not to take
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not wrong to watch offence but people should understand it and implement
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their life because if
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will not produce feature
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will come at least .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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