Some people think new homes need to be built with private outdoor space such as a garden, yard, or balcony. Do you think this is more advantageous or more disadvantageous?

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new modern

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construction ought to be designed with an additional outdoor space

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as a garden or

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. From my point of view, it is a good idea to build homes with outdoor

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since

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areas

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can demonstrate the beauty of

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nature and

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issue.

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and foremost, there are a number of significant benefits of constructing houses with a garden or

balcony

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since personal outdoor living

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can give a sense of satisfaction as most

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gardens

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are so specious with many gorgeous flowers and

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with a beautiful landscape that can be relaxing to our eyes and mind.

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can

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be a source of food

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since

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creats

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many opportunities for individuals to plant various types of

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fruit

trees.

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majority

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of the individuals who reside in rural

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own

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private

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and they consider

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not one of the biggest

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of food but

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the main source of income. Turning to the other side of the argument, despite the obvious advantages of having a

balcony

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or garden at home have

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some disadvantages since it requires a significant amount of money to construct

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kind

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of places.

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new

gardens

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in urban

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can be dangerous to the environment since during the building process construction jobs might influence negatively

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nature.

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, nowadays majority of the construction works have caused some serious environmental problems. To conclude, having weighed everything mentioned

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, I can come to the conclusion

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that, despite the obvious disadvantages of having

gardens

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or

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balcony

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a balcony

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at home the advantages of

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overweight

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since

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places can be a perfect spot for fun and relaxation.