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Q: Some people say that at all levels of education, from primary school to university, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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The education system is the backbone of a future of a child. Some people believe that learning practical
skills
 must overweight learning facts in a timely manner within the curriculum. It is agreed and in
this
 ,
an
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essay I will provide relevant evidence to prove the opinion.
Firstly
, most of the things that we learn in our life not only learning from school are through practical lessons.
Accordingly
, learning through experimental way with theories is more effective than theoretical learning.
For example
, If a student transfers from a school enclosed with a lack of laboratory facilities to a school with proper facilities due to his or her sports
skills
 he or she will get higher marks for science subjects because of more learning with practice sessions.
Therefore
, allocating more time to learning practical
skills
 is more effective.
Secondly
, only theoretical learning does not produce a real person full of
skills
.
For instance
, there are lots of master-level degree holders who fail in practical life
such
 as some mater-qualified electrical engineers who are unable to fix a problem in a house wiring circuit, and some people with a post-graduate level in accountancy can not fill a basic tax-related application, etc. So, It is required an education system with more practice sessions to generate fully completed graduates with vast practical knowledge in relevant fields. To conclude, changing the syllabus by allocating more time for the development of practical
skills
 is more effective in learning as well as increasing the quality of the output.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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