In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting University studies. Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who decide to do this.
The author explains that
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the Antismoking
Antismoking
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Anti-smoking
campaign
which
targeted Correct pronoun usage
apply
for
young people is successful all over Midwestern cities according to the survey. Change preposition
apply
However
, the lecturer
says that it’s deceptive if we don’t evaluate it carefully.
The author states that using TV and internet
as communication tools and Correct article usage
the internet
also
holding events or workshops at school are good implementations to approach teens. Hence
, the survey shows good results. Firstly
, the survey takers said they have joined an events
and have seen the Ads at least one time and Correct the article-noun agreement
events
an event
these
leads to the feeling that they prefer not to smoke or even try to smoke. The Correct pronoun usage
this
lecturer
, on the other hand
, points out that if we take a look at their behaviors
after the Change the spelling
behaviours
campaign
ending
, it doesn’t seem long-lasting. The Change the form of the verb
ends
lecturer
asserts that the result of campaign
is dramatically changed after 6 months ; young people are very likely to smoke more Add an article
the campaign
next
year and don’t want to attend the campaign
again.
Finally
, the author also
mentions that the public health department wants to expand the antismoking campaign
to gain more teenagers
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teenagers'
teenager's
involvements
because it obviously can go Fix the agreement mistake
involvement
for
a long way and address Change preposition
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the
health issues. But as young people might change their thoughts so the number of smokers will not be decreased. The Correct article usage
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lecturer
, however
speaks that they need to honestly take a look at whole figures for more efficiency.Add the comma(s)
,however
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion