Some people think the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, think there are better alternative ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some
people
think the best way to reduce crime
is to give longer prison
sentences
. Others, however
, think there are better alternative ways to reduce crime
. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
On the one hand, many people
believe that by giving longer prison
sentences
, government
of a country can reduce its national Add an article
the government
crime
rate. This
is because they state the approach may act as a deterrent which can discourage would-be criminals or people
who want to break the law. I can sympathize for
the idea that it can create Change preposition
with
the
psychological effect for Correct article usage
a
people
who are going to break the law because they donnot
want to lose their own freedom or spend a part of their life in Correct your spelling
don't
prison
. However
, for
many circumstances, Change preposition
in
the
petty crimes tend not to be threatened by Correct article usage
apply
this
sentence because the roots of offences are lack
of social Correct article usage
a lack
welfares
which Fix the agreement mistake
welfare
haven’t
supported the poor or homeless Correct subject-verb agreement
hasn’t
people
so that
these Correct word choice
apply
kinds
of people
have no more choices than do illegal jobs for living, which is a reason why they become extremists. It’s hard for the polices to address all of petty
crimes which are not Add an article
the petty
suppose
to be imprisoned because of their huge rate. Wrong verb form
supposed
In addition
, when these kinds
of crime
get used to with Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
structure
of the Correct article usage
the structure
prison
, they tend to connect with other inmates in order to buil
a network. Their cooperation can cause more serious Correct your spelling
build
crime
offenders after they have been released back to
Change preposition
into
community
. For Add an article
the community
instace
, in our country, the Correct your spelling
instance
prison
sentences
for drug criminals are very heavy up to life, it can generally still be psychological for ordinary people
who do not commit this
crime
but the professional drug trafficking system is still raging and more sophisticated because the seniors created their networks in prison
.
I firmly believe there are more efficient methods to reduce criminal
rates rather than increase imprisonment time. Replace the word
crime
Firstly
, in school
system, Add an article
the school
Add an article
the student
a student
student
should be taught about laws, Fix the agreement mistake
students
policies
, the
impact of bad actions Correct word choice
and the
to
others including their relatives, friends, etc, which can spread out and improve Change preposition
on
human’s
Change noun form
human
illeracy
about how to achieve law. Correct your spelling
illiteracy
Secondly
, the Government need to improve awareness about negative
effect when breaking the laws by some solutions Add an article
the negative
such
as propagandize
the typical Wrong verb form
propagandising
sentences
or real circumstances which are relevant to these kinds
of sentences
. Besides
, social wellfare
Correct your spelling
welfare
policies
are also
important for decreasing crime
rate so Correct article usage
the crime
that
the Correct word choice
apply
Gorvenment
needs to improve living Correct your spelling
Government
standard
by having some Fix the agreement mistake
standards
policies
about support
poor Change the verb form
supporting
people
such
as reduce
Wrong verb form
reducing
tax
, Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
let
them use public Wrong verb form
letting
sevice
without paying any kind of fee, Correct your spelling
service
free
of charge in vocational education, …. These Correct word choice
and free
policies
could use for people
who have finished serving their sentences
in order to help them with social integration.
In conclusion, some kinds
of altenative
Correct your spelling
alternative
sentences
are more useful than longer imprisonment sentences
but these ones also
take the Government more time to change and make all of
Change preposition
apply
policies
become suitable.Add an article
the policies
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