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University students should pay the full cost of their studies because university education benefits individuals rather than the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that society provides various benefits to learners, while tertiary education is of utmost importance for students as it has many advantages for graduates as masters in
a specific fields
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 and they get more opportunities in their careers.
Therefore
, learners should pay their dues. I firmly agree with
this
 notion and the following paragraph would highlight my perspective which leads to a logical conclusion.
To begin
 with, the
first
 and foremost is, because of higher educational institutions, after graduation, the pupils are able to do
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a master
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master
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 in the subject they are more interested in universities. They can learn different kinds of
skills
 like time management, computer
skills
, communication techniques and many more that society cannot be able to do.
Moreover
, youth can exchange their idea on foreign platforms which they avail due to tertiary education.
On the other hand
, universities
also
 provide the chance to participate in extracurricular activities which enhance the creative
skills
 of students and allow them to make these
skills
 their careers.
For instance
, funfairs and sports galas are held in every higher educational institution that contains a lot of activities like gaming, painting, acting, dancing, singing, speech competition, debate programs, quiz competitions and many more. Multinational companies and advertising agencies finance these functions and they
also
 select young talent, as a consequence youth work in that particular field to establish their career. To recapitulate, owing to the merits of tertiary education, students should pay the full expenses to universities as it helps them to work in their specific field, as well as it
also
 helps them to improve their physical and mental
skills
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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