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Today, more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#people #robots #tasks #home #work #development
Nowadays,
technology
 has spread in the world and life
beging
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being
begins
begin
on
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 the palm of our
hand
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.
Therefore
,
people
use
robots
 to do tasks
to
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for
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 households and
commerical
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commercial
work
. I think there are
variouse
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various
 plus points to
use
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robots
 rather than
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the nagative
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nagative
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negative
 side. My explanation is in the
enusing
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ensuing
 paragraphs.
To begin
 with, we can the brighter side
to
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use
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the use
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 of
technology
 as
robots
. These days
people
use
 new
technology
 to their
work
 easier. The
robots
are
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work
 as same as
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a human
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human
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humans
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. So, in
the
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household
work
 and industrial or office
work
perform
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robots
to
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apply
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work
 become easy. There are many benefits
of
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to
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that
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the
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use
 of
robots
.
Firstly
, the
robots
use
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 in industry,
they
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apply
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works
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work
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 fast.
Hence
,
producation
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production
 would
be increase
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be increased
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.
As a result
, the income would
be
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rise. The
robots
work
as
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like
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peson
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person
so
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apply
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,
company
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 do not have labour to
work
 hard.
Moreover
, all
work
done
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is done
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 with
automations
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automation
. So,
people
 have time to
self development
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self-development
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 and
managing
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team
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the team
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
robots
are
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are also used
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also
use
 in
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the household
a household
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household
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households
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 for cleaning,
organazing
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organizing
 home items and
also
use
 in cooking.
On the other hand
, there
are
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 some
nagative
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negative
side
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of
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to
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use
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the use
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 of
robots
.
Firstly
, the
work
 done by automated
although
, human being lazy,
they
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and they
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 most of
time
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their time
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 spend on
moblie
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mobile
 and social media.
Secondly
, the
robots
done
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did
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 all
hard
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the hard
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work
 like weightlifting, packing,
transporting
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and transporting
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instead
 of
people
 not
have
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having
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strength
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the strength
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 to
that
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do that
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 types of
works
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work
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. In conclusion, every new
technology
 has
pors
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pros
 and cons. But, in
this
 robotic
techonogy
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technology
 plays
vital
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a vital
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 role in
humans
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human
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 life.
Therefore
, it leads
advantages
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to advantages
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 more than disadvantages.
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