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Prison is the best way to punish criminals. Give your opinion.

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It is predicted that prison is the best way to make lawbreakers reconsider what they have done and discipline them fully and adequately. Personally, I would argue that it is not effective for two main reasons. The major reason why I think jails will not help punish those who commit crimes is not enough rigid.
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, for some illegal
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 the rules for prisoners are not strict and it is uncomplicated to escape the place.
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, if the prisoner's
behavior
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 is appropriate,
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awarness
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awareness
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declines
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,
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 it increases the possibility to make a plan to overcome the security in every country,
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 it is the US or Kazakhstan.
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prison is not an
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 for criminal activity of people and it does not change their actions. Another reason is argued to be not any change in people's mindset.
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 to say, there are several problems why individuals break the law including mental issues which means that after they are released to
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freedom they are not healed. To illustrate, serial killers or burglars,
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, steal or murder again since they
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 either disabilities or a lack of money.
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 is the problem because some cases are much more daunting and complex than they seem to be and going to
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prison does not punish them as it is intended to do. In conclusion,
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 some may disagree, I am of the opinion that there are better ways than keeping people in
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jail
cell
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 due to the fact that it might not be successful and helpful.
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