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Some feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#feel #cities #functionality
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Cities
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 are important to
people
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 so the government spend a lot of money on the organization of
cities
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.
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 some believe that the plan of
cities
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 should be beautiful, others think that their functionality should be prioritised. I am inclined to believe that function of
cities
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 is more significant than their design. On the one hand, everyone wants the place where they live to look nice because the
city
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 they live in affects their moods. In the other words, when you visit any
city
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, you
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 look at the planning of
cities
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such
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 as parks, buildings and roads.
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,
people
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 prefer to visit
cities
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 which have a good design so the more money
cities
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 will earn.
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, Beyoğlu which is a famous
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 in Turkey has various old-designed structures and buildings.
People
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 visit there to take photos.
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, the government should give more importance to regional functions. There are a lot of
people
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 living in
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, so if they put it on the back burner,
cities
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 will not be useful to
people
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.
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, many transportation services look older and ugly.
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, they provide to transport
people
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 over long distances.
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, some skyscrapers are built in the centre of the
city
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 to fulfil
people
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's need for shelter.
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, it is more important for
cities
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 to be functional due to the high quality of life. To conclude, whether a region's design is more important or not is a controversial issue. From my perspective, the region should be planned according to its function because
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 affects
people
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's life.
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, it is predictable that the number of countries which prioritise the
cities
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' functions will increase over time.
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