IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

Nowadays, there is no need for museums and art galleries anymore. Since everything is accessible through internet. People can find any historic fact there. Do you agree or disagree. Give reasons and examples of yours personal knowledge.

#museums #art #galleries #internet #people #fact
Some people have a viewpoint that there is no reason for the existence of physical art galleries and museums,as everything is accessible on the
internet
 these days. I completely disagree with
this
 statement,
this
 essay will put light on my though with specific examples.
Although
 the
internet
 is a great source of information these days. All the knowledge is just one click away ,
however
Add a comma
,however
show examples
internet
 can never replace the importance of these buildings in society. When the community visits these places they get an opportunity to travel and get all the valuable education and get a chance to meet with other folks.
For instance
, a recent report shows that
although
this
 is a digital era ,
however
Add the comma(s)
,however
show examples
 80% of the public love to go to these places
instead
 of seeing pictures and reading all the stuff online. Moving forward, realising things physically brings more joy to the faces of the community. The
Internet
 can not beat that form of happiness as travelling affects the mood of the population in a positive way that the
internet
 cannot. Making a trip to artistic buildings gives one a chance to the public to experience everything in actuality.
For example
, travellers seem to learn things that are vast in their areas of understanding as they can develop their own knowledge by visiting various interesting buildings rather than reading the writings of writers on the
internet
. To recapitulate, even if the
internet
 is a solution to everything but it can never give real experience to the nation. So, these physical structures have their own importance and purpose.
Submitted by ramandeep1512001 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: