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One of your neighbour's children has accidentally broken the front window of your car.

#neighbour #children #front #window #car
Dear Sir/Madam. I am your upstairs
neighbor
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neighbour
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.My name is Suhrob.I am writing
you
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to you
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 about
happened
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the happened
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 accident by your
children
.Cause of my letter to you that you went
a
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on a
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long business trip.I would chat with you about it
by
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apply
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face to face but you are not at home.I was at home yesterday evening after work.Suddenly, I heard my
car
's alarm
after
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and after
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 that I looked at the bottom of the flat there were some
children
 were punching near my
car
then
 I immediately went down.Let's look at
with
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it with
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 my eyes, my
car
's window was broken.There was nobody after
broken
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the broken
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 window.I did not want to call the police for
this
condititionand
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condition and
 I tried to find
children
 who had broken my
car
's front window.Investigations have shown that the
children
 are your
children
.I want you
fix
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to fix
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 it within three days.I hope you
immadiately
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immediately
 eliminate it.
Respectly
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Respectively
Respectfully
Respect
, Suhrob.
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