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The neighbor's children accidentally broken The front of window your car

#neighbor #children #front #window #car
Dear Sir or Madam I'm in order to
neighbor's
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neighbors
neighbor
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. My name is Elmurod. Your
children
 accidentally
broken
Wrong verb form
broke
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 The front of the window
my
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of my
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car
. When I was coming back home. Your
children
 were playing different games.
Then
children
Correct article usage
the children
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 open
gate
Correct article usage
the gate
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 and They go out.
Children
 look everywhere. They were playing
Stone
 after
this
 Time. They played
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with stone
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stone
Fix the agreement mistake
stones
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 and
children
Correct article usage
the children
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 throw
stone
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stones
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each
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at each
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 other after They fly
stone
Fix the agreement mistake
stones
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and
Correct word choice
apply
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in front broken of the window
my
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of my
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car
. You fix in front of
window
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the window
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 my
car
. I'm going to sell
car
Correct pronoun usage
my car
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 so that you buy my
car
.
Then
 you fix and drive My
car
.
Car
Add a verb
isCar
wasCar
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 very nice and New. I don't drive Long. It has New yet. I sell my
car
instead
 of I'm going to a new
car
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