Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In today's modern world, hunger is one of the most difficult
problem
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which is known in the whole world.
Moreover
, some
people
suppose that the
problem
of famine can
be solve
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by science while others guess the solution for
this
is
food
aid
. In my opinion,
education
is the fastest and most efficient
way
to resolve
this
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age-old trouble due to the fact that
education
can provide new ways of growing plants which can reduce
time consuming
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process.
This
essay will discuss both sides. Today the science sphere is developing rapidly which can lead to tackling hunger worldwide.
Firstly
,
education
can
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a way
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way
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for that plants will grow quicker than before which will solve
problem
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the problem
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with
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lack
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of
food
.
For example
, scientists created ways to protect fruits and vegetables from insects, and these methods are used everywhere.
Besides
, if government allocate more money
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researches
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, it will solve many other troubles in the world which will be beneficial not only for one part of
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.
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other hand
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, some
people
believe that
problem
can
be solve
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only by
food
aid
. Unfortunately,
this
way
is
unefficient
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inefficient
because it is expensive and government should allocate many
people
and
food
for
this
.
Besides
, some
countires
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countries
have a multitude of other problems, so they are unable to provide
such
support.
However
, these nations
able
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to provide other
helpsuch
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help such
as send scientists or
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some old
reserch
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research
search
information which will be beneficial to find
solution
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for
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this
trouble. In conclusion, despite all benefits of
food
aid
, science is only one
way
to
tackling
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hunger worldwide.
Also
,
thissolution
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this solution
can lead to other benefits
such
as other problems will
also
solve by
this
motion. On top of that,
education
is more
efficent
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efficient
than
food
aid
since
government
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the government
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does not should allocate many
people
.
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