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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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In the
world
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 there was always a large number of individuals that tend to wear trendy outfits. Reasons behind
this
 fact I am going to list
further
.
To begin
 with, there are eight billion
people
 in our world, due to which appears hard to be noticeable. Those who find it important and seek attention sometimes might try to attract it by wearing fashionable clothes.
For instance
, a number of customers of expensive companies are under the line of the average wage, which proves the fact that some
people
 can wear something they can not afford only because they want it to make an impression. Another example is that sometimes wealthy and famous
people
 show their status through the cloth they wear as
otherwise
 they might make a bad impression and disappoint their audience.
Furthermore
, the fact that individuals tend to buy the latest collections of expensive brands might be a result of a professional advertisement that makes
people
 buy their products.
Besides
, a large number of popular brands sign contracts with celebrities to make them wear and promote their clothes. Stars usually influence their fans so they might replicate the cloth of a beloved celebrity even unintentionally.
For example
, Nike became popular mostly because of the basketball star LeBron James that was wearing their shoes during games. That made Nike shoes a popular choice among his followers. To conclude,
people
 buy fashionable clothes due to many reasons
such
 as lack of attention or will to be like their favourite celebrity.
Although
 spending money on overvalued outfits might not be a wise idea, it can be a significant part of someone’s life which makes it a completely healthy hobby.
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