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In some countries, private cars are now banned from certain city centers. What are advantages of such system and do you think this is something that most cities should adopt.

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With the advancement of technology, science is bringing different kinds of changes around the globe. Personal
cars
 are banned in many countries ,especially in big
cities
.
This
 has many advantages. I will discuss some of them in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost,
pollution
 is the most common issue in the world. The
pollution
 can be air
pollution
 , noise
pollution
 and water
pollution
. Air and noise
pollution
 is the result of so many motor vehicles. To reduce
this
 problem and live in a
pollution
-free ,environment it is very crucial to banned to personal auto vehicles in big
cities
.
Secondly
, nowadays the price of petrol and diesel is going up due to countries' crises. If there are fewer
cars
 in the
cities
,
then
people
 can use that money to raise their children and give them to good education. For an instance, a recent survey taken by the time of India depicts that more than 80% of earnings families go into car payments, insurance and gas.
Consequently
,
people
 can save by having no personal
cars
 in their houses. I personally think
people
 should
this
 new change in their life because that can help them in many ways.
This
 could help
cities
 to reduce the traffic and accidents that happen on daily basis due to congestion.
Furthermore
, the government should implement steps that could improve public transportation in the
cities
. So, folks have smooth life for going and coming to work. To conclude, the government and higher authorities should take steps regarding personal
cars
 and teach
people
 the importance of carpooling and public transportation.
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