You recently heard about some new jobs at a local department store. You would like to work there. Write a letter to store manager of the department store. In your letter -Explain how you heard about the job -Describe the kind of job you would like to have - Give details of your experience and qualifications Dear Sir or Madam,
Dear Sir or Madam,
I recently learned you are hiring for an invaluable
position
at your company with a certain degree of urgency. My name is John Chief and I am eager to write you this
letter expressing my desire to fill that vacant significant position
.
I heard that there are many positions available requiring immediate action. However
, it is the "Security Manager" position
that caught my eye. I noticed that in the job description, you specified desired skills and requirements, in particular
, the job application should have years of experience with a similar position
, have a gun license and present a strong physical presence.
It is with strongly believe I would be the best fit possible, let me show you why. I have more than 10 years of experience managing the security of New York's Walmart first store, always with profound dedication and devotion. Additionally
, I am licensed to carry firearms with me at all times. That is
due to
the fact that I previously worked as a general in the Navy. Plus, I am a significantly tall and strong person which certainly checks out your requirements.
I set myself available to reply to any questions you might have, please contact me through the phone number I left in this
letter. Furthermore
, it is important to let you know I can commence as soon as possible and am ready to work shifts as well.
I look forward to hearing from you,
John Chief.Submitted by Danarvelini
on
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Suitable Writing Tone
Ensure the tone of the letter reflects respect and professionalism. While the tone is somewhat suitable, there is room to make it more polished and respectful, especially considering a job application context.
Logical Structure
Maintain a clear, logical structure throughout your letter. Your letter does well in structuring the content logically, but further emphasizing transitions and connections between paragraphs could enhance readability and flow.
Single Idea Per Paragraph
Aim for one main idea per paragraph, which you've accomplished fairly well. However, a bit more focus and detail in each paragraph could make your points clearer and more compelling.
Complete Response
Be concise and relevant, avoiding overly general statements. You've responded to the tasks effectively but providing more specific examples and evidence could strengthen your task achievement score.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,
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