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In some countries online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is positive or negative development.

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It is true that today more and more
people
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 do their purchases on the internet
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 of going to physical stores. It affects
people
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 in many ways. In my opinion, I believe the drawback of online shopping outweighs the advantages.
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, in
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 essay , I will explore both aspects and demonstrate my opinion. On the
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 hand, critics may point out that,
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 of the most significant drawbacks of online shopping is taking too much time to deliver. Because some online shops deliver only working days or months depending on the distance and shipping policy.
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, unsafe delivery service. Maybe some
items
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 were broken while delivering like
products
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 made from glass, some food
items
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 and paper
products
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. On
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 the biggest problem of online shopping is that we didn't receive the
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 we ordered. Especially, clothes and shoes. Many websites show us very quality
products
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, but they receive fake
products
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. Sometimes not receive the goods. For a good example,
one
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 day I buy a rechargeable lamp. So the details sheet mentioned charging that lamp 24 horses. I charged it for 2 days. But it does not work. According to
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 reason, some
people
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 don't like online shopping.
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, there are a number of arguments in favour of my stance.
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 of the most preponderant ones is that we can find things we like in many shops.
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, there are so many online shops. So they sell a variety of
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 in
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 type.
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 we can find things as we wish. And
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 online shopping is very easier for our busy life. We can buy things at home. Either we can cancel the order quickly as we want. In conclusion,
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 online shopping can bring more benefits for
people
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 in modern life.
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, from my point of view, online shopping has some benefits it cannot surpass its drawbacks.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled convenience
  • remote areas
  • wide range of products
  • broad selection
  • price comparison
  • customer satisfaction
  • value for money
  • impact on local businesses
  • economic diversity
  • job losses
  • environmental implications
  • packaging waste
  • carbon emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • data privacy
  • cybersecurity
  • personal data
  • tactile shopping experience
  • immediate gratification
  • physically examined
  • robust measures
  • consumer information
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