Some people thing that government should not use the recession during the Coronavirus. Do you agree with this opinion?

Yes, I fully agree with that type of
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it. In my opinion,
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all
people
in
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the perioud
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of coronavirus were in
deeprasion
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depression
, and as we saw, when
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use
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recession, some
people
made suicide. So if
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government
will use
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, in my mind
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people
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because if
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in
recession
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they'
ll
not go out
from
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their houses, because they were scared
by
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Coronavirus. In my point of
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people
who died because of
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will be much lower than if
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will not tell about
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coronavirus
to
people
and they'
ll
make sick each other, and die from it. But
also
, It's very bad if
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will be in
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depression
,
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because it'
ll
influence to
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people
. Some
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some
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shizophreniya
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schizophrenia
. So
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
wants to protect us, we just need to understand it and live, we can chat with our friends or family, we can study online, and spend time really
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, without thinking about it
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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