In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Mobile phone usage and mobile technology increasing in most countries.
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mobile
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payment processing drastically raising. In
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I would discuss the pros and cons of
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some benefits of
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developments. Most
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service
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providers are currently using
mobile
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a mobile
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application
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applications
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for delivering their services,
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we can do
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particular payments using their mobile apps without any
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. We can complete our payment anytime anywhere as well.
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, if my mobile connection limit has been reached I can use
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service provider
application
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payments even
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night.
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applications
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have the facility to go back and track our previous transactions which
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completed with that
application
or service provider. So it is more beneficial to manage our
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expenses properly.
On the other hand
, drawbacks are
also
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this
option. As we know all
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mobile apps
processing
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in the web &
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environment.
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there is
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threat
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over the world,
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threats
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to
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mobile
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the mobile
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app
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also
.
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magazine latest reviled that cyber
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amount when compared with the
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mostly
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mobile app operations and some
threats
were billions of cost to recoveries.
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applications
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are storing our personal
details
such
as our name, address, card
details
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risk to 3rd party can obtain those
details
while the cyber-attack,
consequently
we will face some fake transactions while misappropriating our
details
. To sum up, there
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more pros even compared with cons of processing payments through mobile app increasing in
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most countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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