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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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People have different views about environmental problems. While the extinction of certain plant and animal species is the most environmental problem, I believe that there are other environmental issues that are more vital in
this
 era. In
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 ,essay writing will discuss both views and offer my opinion regarding
this
 notion. On the one hand, there are some reasons why people argue that some species need to be protected.
First
 of all, plants and animals play a key role in our ecosystem.
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, if bees are lost in the world,
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food production would be reduced in the future. And on top of that, if it happens by the lost animal, will be faced
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 situation. Another point is that some specific plants are
also
 important for the environment which is helped to keep balance in our ecosystem.
On the other hand
, my writing would agree with those who believe that another environmental problem is more crucial in today's time. Industrial waste takes as an example, it
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 out into the river or ocean, which caused water pollution, which is why sea fish or local death increased day by day. Not only
this
 but
also
 plastic waste is risky for our ecosystem.
Such
 as, it creates a bad impact on bird stomachs as well fish. Meanwhile, cutting trees is a major cause of our warm climate,
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, nowadays
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 are hotter compares to the previous times. To conclude,
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 some impacts on the loss of species, it seems to me that people should be more concerned about other environmental issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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