Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private-health care outweigh the advantages?

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Nowadays, the healthcare system gains tremendous profit. Some

people

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argue whether these services should be financed by the government because they cover the most elementary needs of all human beings. In

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essay, I will elaborate on the pros and cons of private care

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explain why I believe it is disadvantageous for

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with, regardless of financial aspects, every human being faces sickness.

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, flu, pox or infection are illnesses that almost everyone goes through during their lifetime. Because in many countries public services do not have sufficient resources,

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are forced to go to private institutions. For some, it is an unbelievable expense that they cannot afford. Certainly, it is a significant threat to social well-being and defeats the purpose of fulfilling a human basic need that should be easily available.

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, some governments do not have enough money to give fair access to medication for their

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, it is impossible to make any change in

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matter without neglecting other important needs of citizens

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as affordable transportation.

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, if they spend on providing more doctors

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public insurance, they will likely increase the country's debt.

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experience the benefits of

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decision;

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, politics face the challenge of looking for additional funding.

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, many are worried about the privatization of the current healthcare system. In my opinion, focusing on public care brings much more advantages for

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because it allows them to mind a primary necessity of all.

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Consider expanding on the main points discussed to provide a more in-depth analysis.

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Ensure that your arguments are well supported by specific examples to enhance clarity and persuasiveness.

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Make sure each paragraph flows logically to the next, perhaps by using more cohesive devices.

coherence and cohesion

Provide a more definitive stance in the conclusion, summarizing your main points and reinforcing your opinion.

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The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic and attempts to address both sides of the argument.

coherence and cohesion

Strong introduction and conclusion that frame the discussion well.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

254 words

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