Museums and art galleries should show local history and culture instead of work from different countries. Disvuss both views and gove your opinion

As we know in museums, there are lots of works of
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different
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and countries. I think
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is a place where we find peace of the soul, by looking at the pictures were done by amazing
people
of each country. But at the same
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think we could
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in
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history lovers. Personally, I love watching and seeing and
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judging
the galleries in myself, without other
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speaking.
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art galleries and museums
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the way it is. I have visited most of countries museums and art
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true, there is no local history and culture. But there were special buildings to show foreign
people
the local history and culture. Here is just the problem is
that is
not inside the museum.
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