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Some people say the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals

Some individuals believe that the main environmental problems were caused by the loss of some specific
species
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 of plants or animals but others say that more important environmental problems are caused by some other things. In
this
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 essay, I will be discussing how the loss of some
species
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 causes environmental issues and other leading factors of global warming.
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, there are some sets of
species
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 that were helping
humans
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 to live on the earth.
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,
Humans
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 cannot live on the earth without the help of birds because these
species
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 help us to grow trees without seeding.
As a result
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, birds help us to prevent global warming. Even though technologies have developed a lot,
humans
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 cannot survive without the existence of other
species
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.
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, all kinds of plants and trees are important for generating oxygen but
humans
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 were destroying everything to build buildings and cities. More than destroying plants and animals, there are some other major causes of environmental issues.
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, burning fuels is the major
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 of the increasing the earth’s temperature.
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, the increasing usage of transportation vehicles like cars, bikes, etc, resulted in generating heat.
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, constructing buildings on lakes or ponds is the other major
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 of lack of fresh
water
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 because while raining, fresh
water
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 does not have any place to store due to it being mixed with the ocean.
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, the groundwater
water
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 level has declined gradually and now we are in lack fresh
water
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. In conclusion, Destroying animal or plant
species
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 are not the only major
cause
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, more than that, some other actions performed by
humans
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 are
also
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 the major
cause
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 of environmental pollution.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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