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Many people use written language in a less formal and more relaxed way. Why? Does this development have advantages? Give reasons and example

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Many
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development
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 have advantages? Give reasons and example In my , opinion many
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 to the increasing numbers of
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 that are able to write and to the technological revolution.
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 of all twenty-one century are well-known
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era of technological
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 which means
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 are more active compared to their ancient relatives. For ,example compare to ten years
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 we can contact each other and inform about some issues just with one massage. Calling someone and having a short conversation about the same issue would take 5 to 10 minutes but
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 took only 2 of them. Rapid
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 given us enormous ways to save
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 but at the same
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 it requires us to be faster while making decisions or actions. As
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 formal writing style which requires extra
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attention
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 not suitable for
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 formal writing getting less used is the high
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 of
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 that have been
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taught
 how to read and write. In the other words writing now is
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 universal tool for information exchange and as it
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always has been,
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 prefer to make their tools
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use
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. Compare to old times
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aesthetics
 of writing is not a
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priority
prioritised
 for human beings.
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beautiful handwriting was my
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 me. But after 15 years since I was a
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first
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shifted from children’s writing towards their speaking skills. In my
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 it is again
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related
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our
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 new direction where
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 is the most important resource. If technological
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 and new IT technology hadn’t been
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developed
.Would formal writing skills be required as
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impotant
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important
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social life? I
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assume
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that even
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 case formal writing would lose its
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popularity
. We should accept that relaxed and more fast writing
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more easy
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 to learn and
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 to
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time consuming
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 and dry formal style. In the
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 I believe in-formal writing will make
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 of learning a lot more
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easier
 for children
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • informality
  • digital communication
  • texting
  • social media
  • instant messaging
  • generational shifts
  • brevity
  • personal expression
  • language standards
  • erosion
  • interlocutors
  • emojis
  • internet slang
  • academic contexts
  • language learning
  • misunderstandings
  • language teaching
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