A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose?

A company is going to present with
som
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some
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money
either to help the arts or to
protict
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protect
protest
the situation. In my opinion, it is great for
companies
to invest in
art
and environmental protection. Because these things are very useful to us. I will put my thoughts into words in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, some
people
pointout
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point out
that the firm should give
money
as
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a donation
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donation
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donations
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in order to develop
artworks
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artwork
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. Because
progresting
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progressing
art
is the most cardinal aspect for
public
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the public
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. Especially our national music instruments or music express our culture and
traditional
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. They have been part of our history for a long time.
For example
dutar,
gijjak
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Najjar
, chaykoviz or horn else applicable to
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the song
a song
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song
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songs
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for instance
makam
it
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apply
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contains different marvellous sounds as well as folk music. So they should be come on
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the world
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world wide
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worldwide
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by various
assotsattion
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association
.
Furthermore
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various nations of the world ought to enjoy them.
On the other hand
, I agree with both of these opinions.
Art
also
needs a lot of
money
. If
companies
put
money
on
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into
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art
,
our
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apply
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art
in our country will be very famous. But in my
opinion
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,opinion
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companies
should
bet
money
to keep the environment clean. Because the cleaner the environment, the more useful it is for us. Various harmful
odors
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do not spread.
Companies
should
bet
more
money
for
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on
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environmental protection. It is necessary to build different types of garbage dumps and keep the land clean, and these places should be moved away from
people
's places of residence.
Then
people
's lives and their lives will be free from danger. Must do these things. For
this
different
companies
have to
bet
more
money
for
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these works. In conclusion,
companies
should
bet
more
money
on
art
to protect the environment and know that these things are very useful for
people
.
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