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In many countries, pets are treated as family members and people spend a lot of money on them. What are the advantages (pros, benefits, positive aspects) and disadvantages (cons, negative aspects, drawbacks) of having a pet?

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In
this
 modern era, we can observe that
people
 own
pets
 and they have emotional attachments with them.
Moreover
, they behave as if
pets
 are an important part of their family.
That is
 why
people
 invest a lot of cash in them. In my opinion, there are many pros and cons to
this
, which I am going to discuss in my essay.
Firstly
, there are many advantages to having a
pet
. In my country, a puppy is the most common animal
people
 do have. The puppy is considered the most faithful animal. When a person takes care of a dog, he becomes emotionally attached to it. The public keeps them as guards. Dogs have strong smelling power. They can detect culprits easily.
Moreover
, Keeping a pup as a
pet
 gives them peace and a sense of satisfaction.
Pet
also
 serve as a leisure time activity as children prefer to play with them. Including
this
,
people
 feel happy when they walk with them. The concept of living together is vanishing day by day. As we know, " An empty mind is the devil's place". So, having a
pet
 make
people
's mind free and
also
 protect them from overthinking which might happen in their free time with empty heads.
On the other hand
, there are many drawbacks to having
pets
.
People
 spend more time with their
pets
 as compared to their family members. They invest money in
pets
 rather than fulfilling the needs of their family.They become so mentally attached to their
pets
 that they start ignoring their partners, which is an alarming situation. Concluding my views, there are both positive and negative effects of having
pets
. A balance is important. Taking care of
pets
 is important. But one should
also
 give equal importance to their family.
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