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Is it better to take a gap year to travel or to go straight to university? Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

#gap #year #travel #university #idea #waste #time
Meanwhile, there are a lot of discussions revolving around taking a year gap for travelling or directly
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 admission into universities after college. In my opinion, encouraging a
student
 to go on vacation by taking a year’s gap will not be ideal.
This
 essay will illustrate both views and
also
 by justifying my viewpoint. On the one hand, travelling to any new place or country has become extremely expensive in recent times. Anyhow, a
student
 cannot afford to go on vacation on their own income
therefore
 they need to solely depend on their parents.
For instance
, I had a group of friends where every summer they used to travel to a new place along with their parents.
Moreover
,
such
 a situation might not be the same for every
student
 due to the lack of financial independence of their family.
On the other hand
, it is an undeniable argument that taking a break during any period of studies or career will affect anyone’s mind towards distraction. It has been seen in many countries that taking a break during academic studies leads students into other unwanted social activities and makes them
addict
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 to parties. In order to, focus on productive learning around studies it is mandatory to keep progressing in every aspect of life being a
student
. To conclude
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, taking a break after college
for
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 travelling is an expensive affair for any
student
 to afford and they had to depend on their
parents
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 income. Meanwhile, for learning there should not be any year gap which is waste of time in my opinion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • travel
  • university
  • cultural exposure
  • personal growth
  • independence
  • interests
  • passions
  • seamless transition
  • momentum
  • academic development
  • personal development
  • delayed start
  • traditional education path
  • self-discovery
  • introspection
  • specialized knowledge
  • future careers
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