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Some people say that the current level of air travel is acceptable where as other people believe air travel should be reduced and the government should play a role in this. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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Introduction
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individuale
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individuals
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believe
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believes
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 that
number
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 of
air
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travel
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 has been accepted.
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, some others say
air
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travel
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 must decrease and
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a team
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team
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teams
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 of government must create new roles.
This
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 essay discussed both of
veiw
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view
point
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.
Body paragraph 1
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, some people believe that
number
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 of
air
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travel
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 is perfect.
This
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 group say
in
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this
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current
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 should part of
travel
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 done by
air
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plan
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plane
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. In fact,
air
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travel
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usuly
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usually
have
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 safety for all
passenge
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passengers
passenger
.
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,
this
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choiess
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choice
 might bring reduce
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roud
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road
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accident
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instance
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 university
Oxford
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 recently found that in
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last
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 10 years ago
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number
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a number
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 of
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roud
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road
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accident
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accidents
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 has a dramatic
fell
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 by 55%.
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Moreover
number
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 of
air
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travel
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 grow sharply. Some
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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 are willing to
air
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plan
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 for
traveling
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travelling
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. While
,
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apply
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 not only growing use
air
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travel
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 but
also
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decling
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declining
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roud
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road
accident
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.
This
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 process might result in
falling
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a falling
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roud
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rain
accident
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.
This
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 essay agreed about
this
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veiw
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view
becuase
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because
 using
air
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travel
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 not only decline
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roud
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road
accident
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 but
also
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 fall time
travel
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.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, some
individuale
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individuals
individual
 says
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number
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the number
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 of
air
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travel
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 should reduce.
This
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 group believe that that level of
air
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travel
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 might
dengeres
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dangerous
 for
environment
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the environment
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.
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,
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product
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a product
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 of
pollution
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 by
air
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plan
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 leads to
demage
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damage
 to
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air
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the air
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.
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,
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the Canada
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Canada
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Canadian
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 government
recent
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recently
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 found that
amount
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the amount
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 of
pollution
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product
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produced
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 by
air
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plan
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in
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apply
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5 years ago
has
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grew
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 slowly by 20%.
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,
this
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pollution
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 might
couse
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cause
 imposing
dengerec
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danger
for
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to
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life
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living
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 environment.
This
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disagree
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accotiated
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associated
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becuase
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because
product
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pollution
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 in
new
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the new
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air
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plan
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 reduce in recent years.
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,
amount
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the amount
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 of
pollution
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 by
plan
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decline
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declines
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that
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than
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 other machines.
Conclusion
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conclusion
, some believe
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number
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a number
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 of
air
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travel
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 is best. Some others say
this
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 program
shoud
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should
 decline.
This
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esaay
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essay
 believe using
air
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plan
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 for
travel
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 have advantages,
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 using new
tecnologic
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technology
technologies
technologic
 in
air
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plan
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 decrease
product
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pollution
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 in
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air
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the air
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 and environment will
safe
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be safe
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aviation industry
  • global economy
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • technological advancements
  • sustainable alternatives
  • noise pollution
  • high-speed rail networks
  • incentivize
  • green aviation technologies
  • fuel efficiency
  • cultural exchanges
  • personal and professional relationships
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