Nowadays many students choose to take a year off before going to university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of taking a gap year, and give your own opinion about whether it is a good idea.

More and more
students
have a gap
year
between high school and
university
. Some
people
think that there are some drawbacks to
take
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a
year
off, but in my opinion, young
people
can gain more
benefits
for their future,
which
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I definitely agree about
this
view. Some
people
think that there are lots of drawbacks to a have a
year
off before going to
university
.
Firstly
, the
students
taking a
year
off
who
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need financial support from their family,
otherwise
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they need to work for their living that
year
.
For example
, the job they work may not they are really
interested
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, and it wastes their time.
For
example
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a busy student might have to take a
part time
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role to make some wages
,
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or ask their family to send them a monthly stipend.
Secondly
, they have one
year
behind
from
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their classmates,
it
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will lead
that
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they have no common language with their classmates.
Finally
, not
every
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parents
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understand the student’s decision to a
year
off which will make them have not a good relationship with their family, especially in a low-income family.
On the other hand
, I think that young
people
can get more
benefits
from taking a
year
off before they choose a field to study at
university
.
Firstly
, they can have more time to find the field they
really
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interest
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as
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their subject to study at
university
.
Secondly
,
students
have more chances to try different kinds of jobs that will help them gain different
experience
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experiences
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.
For example
, even if
students
just work as a sales
assistant
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in a job, they can learn communication skills to talk with different
people
which is a useful skill for their whole life.
Finally
, young
people
can broaden their network
from
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the
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real society not just from school. In conclusion, there are drawbacks and
benefits
of
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taking a gap
year
, but I think young
people
can gain more
benefits
from taking a
year
off before going to
university
.
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