You had a birthday party and you were playing loud music. Your neighbor Mr. Smith complained. Write a formal letter of apology explaining that it was a special occasion and that it won't happen again.

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Dear

Mr.

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Smith, I am writing

this

letter in order to apologize to you for the inconvenience I

have

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caused you yesterday night. I

have

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lead

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you to

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great displeasure with the loud music I have played, so I wanted to apologize for the misfortune I gave you. I wanted to apologize to you but you weren'

home at that time so ,I decided to write you

this

letter.

Firstly

I would like to tell you

Mr.

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Smith that I didn'

do it on purpose.I had a reason for doing so.The reason

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the loud music I played

last

night was

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I was having a birthday party.

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I know that

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an excuse for doing so.But I didn'

want to disappoint my guest and for

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I have caused you

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great displeasure for which I sincerely apologize

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. I hope that you will forgive me and give me a chance to apologize to you face to face. Thank you.

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sincerely, Anelia Radanova

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

10 paragraphs

166 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You had a birthday party and you were playing loud music. Your neighbor Mr. Smith complained. Write a formal letter of apology explaining that it was a special occasion and that it won&#39;t happen again.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

These days Internet has brought a revolution in the world. what are the advantages and disadvantages of internet?

Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing and martial arts, should be banned from international competitions. To what extent do you agree?

More and more people are opting for readymade ford intead of freshly home cooked food. Discuss advantageous and disadvantages?

some people say that parents should encourage their children to take parts in organized group activities in their free time, others say that it's important for them to learn how occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

You had a birthday party and you were playing loud music. Your neighbor Mr. Smith complained. Write a formal letter of apology explaining that it was a special occasion and that it won't happen again.