You had a birthday party and you were playing loud music. Your neighbor Mr. Smith complained. Write a formal letter of apology explaining that it was a special occasion and that it won't happen again.

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Dear

Mr.

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Smith, I am writing

this

letter in order to apologize to you for the inconvenience I

have

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caused you yesterday night. I

have

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lead

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you to

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great displeasure with the loud music I have played, so I wanted to apologize for the misfortune I gave you. I wanted to apologize to you but you weren'

home at that time so ,I decided to write you

this

letter.

Firstly

I would like to tell you

Mr.

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Smith that I didn'

do it on purpose.I had a reason for doing so.The reason

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the loud music I played

last

night was

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I was having a birthday party.

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I know that

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an excuse for doing so.But I didn'

want to disappoint my guest and for

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I have caused you

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great displeasure for which I sincerely apologize

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. I hope that you will forgive me and give me a chance to apologize to you face to face. Thank you.

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sincerely, Anelia Radanova

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

10 paragraphs

166 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You had a birthday party and you were playing loud music. Your neighbor Mr. Smith complained. Write a formal letter of apology explaining that it was a special occasion and that it won&#39;t happen again.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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