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Some people believe that school students should be separated based on their abilities and talented, while others think that all students should study together. Discuss both views and express your opinion.

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Education plays a key role to build smart future generations. It is a question of debate , whether
students
 need to be separated based on their intellectual
capability
 or not. In my opinion, there is no requirement for any kind of separation in the classroom.
However
, it would be advisable to give special training to
students
. In
this
 essay , I shall discuss different views on
this
 topic and summarise the reason for my view.
To begin
 with , I shall start with the view that the kids in educational institutions should be partitioned based on their talents .The major reason behind
this
 perception , is
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ease of training , and identifying and sharpening the individual's
capability
 in a particular area.
For instance
 , as per the times report some countries successfully inculcate
such
 methodology in schools.
This
 creates a positive impact on identifying and training the new talents appropriately.
On the other hand
 , some people believe there is not required any kind of differentiation between the
students
 based on their
capability
, because that may lead to inferiority feeling to the student who is not talented. The survey conducted by Toyota, a private organisation, shows that the
students
 of the school - which follows the talent differentiation programme- are highly unsatisfied with
this
 strategy. In conclusion, separation based on talent is not really demanding in the school,
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 the especially capable
students
 can give training based on their
capability
 and interest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • mixed-ability
  • targeted teaching
  • boredom
  • frustration
  • stigma
  • self-esteem
  • inequalities
  • inclusivity
  • peer learning
  • collaboration
  • diversity
  • accommodate
  • advanced learners
  • equitable
  • educational opportunities
  • real-world environments
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