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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did thier training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wise. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Doctors
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 are considered
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 because they can save a life. Some
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 believe that
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 skilled professionals like
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 and engineers should not leave their country to
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 abroad. In my
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 they should be allowed to
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 from anywhere they like, as it is a matter of personal choice. Some occupations are very specific and
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 think that
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 they need those skilled workers to contribute back to
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society.
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, a country cannot thrive if there are not enough
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 or engineers, which helps in building the economy.
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, countries
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 as
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India
, Nigeria and Pakistan need
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 who are experts in their field like
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, to treat their population in rural areas.
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,
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 in the villages are not
privilaged
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privileged
 to afford a doctor, so they should do health camps for free to help those in need.
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, everyone has a right to make a
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choice
 in their own life, and others cannot decide their fate.
Physicans
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Physicians
 and engineers are
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 human beings and they have a right to decide about their place of
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.
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, if they plan to move abroad for their
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, that should not be a problem
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 the common
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, if an engineer from India has an opportunity to
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 at his dream company,
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 is
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building
 the tallest building in the world, but the company is in Canada, he should be able to make the decision to move or not. In conclusion,
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 feel that talented professionals should stay in their homeland and serve citizens, it should be decided by that professional himself, as it is his personal choice.
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