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Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do a different kind of jobs. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that people should opt for another
career
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 for the betterment of their professional progress at least once in their lifetime . I strongly believe that
this
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 brings another level of confidence in the
employee
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 and has more advantages than disadvantages. It is opined by many people that one has to come out of his comfort zone to become successful either in personal or professional life. There are several advantages to swapping careers in another vertical.
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 with, if an
employee
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 is doing the same
job
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 for many years, it becomes monotonous for him and he has no thrive for that particular
job
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therefore
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 if he shifts to another
career
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along with
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 his past experiences, it would help him to reach a better position in the organization.
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, a professional can enlarge his knowledge horizon by changing a
career
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 as he comes to know different requirements and opportunities in a new
job
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.
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, these changes give him handsome monetary benefits and he can live a satisfactory life and
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fulfil the needs of family members.
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, I believe that there is
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less financial benefit for an
employee
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 if he is working at the same company and a position. He can not grow in his
career
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 and easily gets demotivated by his work. As an
employee
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 is doing a stagnant
job
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 for a longer time, he becomes conservative which deteriorates his thought process.
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, I believe that for the holistic development of a
professional
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 he should shift his
career
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 at least once in his time, it will allow him to cater to more opportunities and
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 his
career
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 graph.
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task response
Provide a clear and direct answer to the prompt. Develop a stronger argument either for or against changing careers. Ensure that all parts of the question are addressed effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Organize ideas logically and ensure that there is a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Use transition words and linking phrases to improve coherence and cohesion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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