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Some people say, its a waste of time to plan for the future. We should live in the present. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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A few people frequently say that humans ought to live with the present,
do
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and do
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 not need to have
plan
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a plan
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 for the impending
life
. I completely agree
to
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this
 view and think that it is more beneficial for individuals to live with
present
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the present
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 without the
future
 thinking.
First
 of all, not considering our upcoming
life
 can create
our
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 happier
life
.
In other words
, if we do not try to have
plans
 for our
future
life
then
 it may be positive because of
frequently
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the frequently
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 changing
plans
 of humans. Even though most
of
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people
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the people
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 have
a tons
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tons
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 of
plans
which
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they
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 will need to do in the
future
, their tactics are changing
as a result
 of finding
better
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a better
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one
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ones
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.
For example
, my father had some ideas
to
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the
next
 year about buying a hundred square kilometre field with aim of starting
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a farm
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, but now he changed
himself
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his
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 idea to pick up
new
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a new
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 house for
him
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his
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 grandsons.
Thus
, we mankind should not figure
plans
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out plans
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 and live in
present
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the present
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 to have
happier
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a happier
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life
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lives
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.
Second
 of all, not having any extra
plans
 for
future
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the future
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 makes the
enjoyable
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most enjoyable
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 moment of our
life
.
That is
 to say, if do not make
plans
 for years to come,
this
 not only
create
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creates
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 the perfect condition but it
also
help
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helps
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 to create
the
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a
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 memorable time for us.
For instance
, my uncle
do
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does
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 not have any
plans
 for
future
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the future
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 and he always
try
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tries
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 to get
a
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apply
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relaxation from himself
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in todays
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todays
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today's
life
.
Therefore
,
such
person
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a person
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 can be
good
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a good
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 example who
are
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is
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 living with the present and
more
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happier. To conclude, I strongly believe that living
with
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today can be
more handy
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 to make
life
 happier and unforgettable.
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