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The expansion of multinational companies and increase in globalization produces positive effects to everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Globalization has been a radical process which has changed the international and national economies. In that sense, during
last
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 decades we have been seeing an expansion of multinational
companies
 and the increase of
this
 intertwined economical network from all over the world. In
this
 context, I think that the international growth of
this
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 trademarks does not have positive effects, especially in developing
countries
. It has been said that when big
companies
 arrive
to
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in
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 poor nations, they tend to extract the national resources or generate low-paid work for the locals.
This
 has been a trend in Southern Asia where national resources are abundant and governments look for
the
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private investment in their economies.
For example
, in the case of Southeastern
Asia'
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Asia
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countries
, it is usual that they provide
workers
 for these big private firms, as
it
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apply
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can be seen with shirts printed in
countries
as
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 Vietnam or Cambodia. The
workers
 from that
countries
 have access to facilities from these
companies
, but with very scarce salaries.
In
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 the other hand, some economists have said that locals can have a big opportunity by providing a job for these private institutions. They have said that if a lot of money goes to regional or local
workers
,
this
 money will impact
possitively
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positively
 on the country
,
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 because the wage from
this
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these
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workers
 will circulate in the national economy.
However
, I think that
these
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 argument doesn't consider very well the
unequalities
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inequalities
 in the international context and that it's not easy for poor
workers
 to have access to better conditions. In conclusion, I would say that international
companies
 generate
and
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an
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 impact
in
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on
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 the local economies, by investing in them. If we consider that it is difficult for a worker
of
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from
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 some poor
countries
 to have access to better conditions, I would say that the presence of these multinational
companies
have
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 an impact, depending on the economic development of the nation where they are located
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