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Many people believe that social network sites such as fb have had a huge negative impacts on both individuals n society. To what extent do you agree.

#people #network #sites #fb #impacts #individuals #n #society
In today’s world,
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technology is emerging day-
by-
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 day which is impacting the lives of various people and
it
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has a detrimental result on society. In
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negative
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the negative
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aspect
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 of social networking sites. To commence with, I believe that social networking sites
such
 as Instagram and Facebook are affecting the minds of
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the youngster
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youngster
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 in a bad way. Adolescents are becoming addicted to
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technology,
Consequently
, they were running towards isolation from their own families and they having aggression
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.
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,
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research conducted by the World Health Organisation on
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addiction
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smart phones
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smartphones
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, it was concluded that there are 53% of
individual
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,
who
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are
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 residing in a rehabilitation centre for the
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 usage of mobile phones.
Additionally
, one of the biggest
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 of indulging in the utilisation of
internet
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the internet
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 and social media is the involvement in crime based on
internet
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the internet
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. As
,
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 the information is not secured enough on online platforms, anyone can hack the account and they could use the information in a negative manner,
then
, the innocent person would have to face the consequences.
As a result
, nowadays, people are getting much
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 in
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assault
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the survey conducted by the World Crime Association, it was found out that there are 85% of
population
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,
who
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is getting
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 in these activities. To conclude, I am firmly convinced by the view that the youth is using
the
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social media in a negative way on
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huge forum as some personage are getting
addictive
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 to the apps and others are opting for
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hacking. There should be some strict laws in the country to overcome the outcome.
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