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Many people believe that social network sites such as fb have had a huge negative impacts on both individuals n society. To what extent do you agree.

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India is a developing country with rapid modernisation and technical development.
People
 through the use of technology and various social platforms want to influence and impact the netizens in any possible way. A large population thinks that
this
 influences
negative
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 for both the users and the community. Personally, I believe that both positive and negative effects can be witnessed and I will be elaborating
my
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 views in the
below mentioned
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 paragraphs.
Firstly
, networking sites give
enormous
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 amount of benefits when properly used. These advantages can be related to socialization, communication and
also
 the availability of indulgement in a group.
For instance
, Facebook
being
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the
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a
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 popular app in providing a prominent and creative way to talk to
people
 who are far away and
also
 various kinds of media can be shared with them.
Moreover
, social groups and organisations are nowadays very active on these platforms in order to be available
for
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the
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society
.
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Individuals
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Individual
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An individual
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 from the same
society
 or community can explain
his
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or
her
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their
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 problem and difficulties
of
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in
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 life with those
society oriented
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society-oriented
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 clusters of
people
 and
as a
result
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,result
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 can recognise a desired solution. So, it is a positive pro of these
networkings
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networking
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.
Furthermore
, there are uncountable apps and services that are claiming to provide the best features and functions resulting in the high usage of these resources by the local
people
.
Thus
,
young
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the young
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 generation becoming prey to these manipulating stages is common in the recent world.
For example
, youngsters using
instagram
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Instagram
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,
facebook
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Facebook
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,
tiktok
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TikTok
 and other applications often follow renowned celebrities. Some proportion of these users start to troll those famous
people
 and involve themselves in
illegal
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the illegal
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framework
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frameworks
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. Various negative impacts like social evils and
society degrading
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phenomenas
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phenomena
 are occurring
as a result
 of
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non appropriate
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non-appropriate
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 use of networking websites and applications. In conclusion, suitable usage of these social networking sites can result in different positive benefits.
However
, room perception of the functions that are given and unethical behaviour by
young
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the young
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 generation and teenagers can harm them as well as
the
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society
.
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