In the past it was only possible to contact people at home by letter or telephone. Nowadays, mobile devices mean that we can communicate with people anywhere and at any time. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It has been many years since the

first

telephone was created. The only

way

for anybody, until 40 years ago, to contact some friends or relatives was by writing a letter.

This

could be sometimes boring and stressful for

everyone

waiting for some news from someone. Just thinking about the time spent writing and sending a letter to anyone living in another city, town, village, or country. Nowadays, because of mobile devices, everybody, in real-time, can keep in touch with their own relatives or friends.

That is

an amazing step closer to the future. Because of all the social networks, I can find on my mobile phone, I can know everything about other people's lives anytime I want. By using a simple

way

to say, we could believe that "today,

everyone

is the hacker of

everyone

that is

a breaking point from the ancient technological ages,

that

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the fourth industrial revolution:

everyone

could chat or type a message in order to talk about something with another person on the other side of a display. By the

way

, the development of new possibilities to contact each other provided a

way

for people to be active and to acknowledge their thoughts or their curiosities about someone, but,

on the other hand

, to lose a lot of their time in front of a screen which provided the lack of talking with their mouth, or the possibility for anyone to show their feelings. Overall, it is essential to look at the future and find new types of technology which can change our lifestyles, but, in the meanwhile, be aware and remember that,

first

of all, we are human beings and not machines.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

279 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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